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Kim Kitsuragi[edit]

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Looking for input from someone who is good at organizing/summarizing an overwhelming number of sources. I'm hoping to take this article to GA, maybe even further. The article could mainly use a second opinion on what's missing, and anything that seems unclear to an outside reader. There are a lot of sources that talk about this character. Maybe too many. I don't want to fully omit sources in the interest of brevity, but I know there is a better way to summarize and organize the reception. I'd appreciate an outside opinion. Shooterwalker (talk) 17:25, 17 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Z1720[edit]

Comments after a quick skim:

Lede needs to be expanded.
Appearances needs to be expanded, per the orange banner.
Reception is way too long. Consider reading WP:RECEPTION and organise the section by categories.
Has this person influenced culture or society?

Let me know if you have any questions. Z1720 (talk) 16:57, 20 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Z1720: I can definitely expand the lead and the appearances section. I agree with you about the reception, and could use some more feedback. Can you suggest some ways to cover the same material in a more organized, succinct way? Shooterwalker (talk) 20:04, 21 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Shooterwalker: WP:RECEPTION has suggestions on how to do this. Z1720 (talk) 20:15, 21 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I made some few changes and removed Cultured Vultures as unreliable. I think the interview and commentary about its portrayal could be potentially be removed. 🍕Boneless Pizza!🍕 (🔔) 05:56, 22 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]